Wednesday, September 3, 2025

Cutting Repetitive Phrases: How to Keep Your Writing Fresh Across a Novel

Every writer has go-to phrases—those trusty turns of speech that feel comfortable and reliable. But if characters keep nodding sagely like malfunctioning androids or sighing dramatically as if auditioning for a space opera, readers will start seeing patterns faster than a rogue AI detecting anomalies in deep-space transmissions.

So, how do writers spot and eliminate redundancy while keeping their language dynamic?

Why Repetitive Phrases Weaken a Story

๐Ÿš€ Diluted Impact: When a phrase is overused, it loses its gravity. If your protagonist always "clenches his fists" when angry, he might start resembling an NPC stuck in a glitchy loop rather than a complex character with layered reactions.

๐Ÿช Reader Fatigue: If tense moments always trigger "heart pounding" or "a chill ran down their spine," readers may start skimming instead of experiencing the full cinematic tension. Much like a space pilot ignoring redundant system alerts—until something truly goes wrong.

๐Ÿ‘พ Loss of Variety in Voice and Style: Strong writing evolves over the course of a novel. When characters echo the same expressions, the prose stagnates. Imagine an intergalactic council where every diplomat just nods thoughtfully instead of debating—sounds more like an ineffective government simulation than a gripping story.

How to Spot Overused Phrases

๐Ÿ” Search Your Manuscript: Run a keyword scan to catch common descriptors lurking in the shadows. If certain expressions appear like recurring background extras in your space station scene, it’s time to vary them.

๐Ÿ”Š Read Aloud for Repetition: Some redundancies aren’t obvious until spoken. Hearing your prose is like debugging a spaceship’s AI—you’ll catch glitches that weren’t visible in the code.

๐Ÿค” Question Necessity: Does this phrase add depth, or is it filler text? If your villain smirks too often, they may start feeling less like a cunning antagonist and more like a stock image labeled "scheming overlord."

Strategies to Keep Language Fresh

Use Specificity Over Generality: Instead of "he smiled weakly," deepen the moment: His lips curled, but the weariness behind his eyes betrayed the effort—as if he’d been navigating asteroid fields all night.

Tie Word Choice to Character Voice: Each character should express themselves uniquely. If multiple characters “grit their teeth” when angry, consider individualized reactions. Maybe your starship mechanic mutter-curses in three alien dialects, while your diplomat presses their fingers together like calculating battle strategy.

Expand Descriptive Vocabulary: Swap overused phrases for varied alternatives. If a character constantly runs a hand through their hair, try gestures that reflect their personality—adjusting their collar, cracking their knuckles, or tapping the console in a rhythm only they understand.

Mix Up Sentence Rhythm: If repeated phrases appear at the beginning or end of sentences, adjusting structure can break the pattern—like tweaking warp drive settings for smoother acceleration.

A novel feels alive when its language is intentional, varied, and engaging. By eliminating repetitive phrases, writers ensure their prose remains fresh, immersive, and never reads like a malfunctioning AI script.

Wednesday, August 27, 2025

Quatermass, Doctor Who, and Buckaroo Banzai: Cult Sci-Fi’s Unlikely Trio

Science fiction thrives on bold, unconventional heroes—the kind who outthink cosmic horrors, travel through time armed with charm and ingenuity, or casually balance neurosurgery with interdimensional adventures. Bernard Quatermass (Quatermass, 1953–1979), the Doctor (Doctor Who, 1963–present), and Buckaroo Banzai (The Adventures of Buckaroo Banzai Across the 8th Dimension, 1984) each carved out distinct identities, yet they share surprising connections. Let’s step into the timestream—or at least through the 8th Dimension—and explore how these cult classics shaped their own unique corners of the genre.

The Thinker, The Traveler, and The Rockstar

Sci-fi protagonists come in many flavors: some confront the unknown with cold rationality, others rewrite timelines with a sonic screwdriver, and a select few save the world while playing the guitar and driving a jet car.

  • Bernard Quatermass: A brilliant scientist who faces alien phenomena with methodical precision and a no-nonsense attitude. He’s the type who would glance at an apocalyptic crisis and say, “Well, this is scientifically improbable,” even as tentacles wrap around his ankles. Few moments in the series are as unsettling as Victor Carroon’s gradual transformation in The Quatermass Experiment (1953), where horror unfolds not through flashy effects but an agonizing realization—Carroon is absorbing everything he touches.
  • The Doctor: A time-traveling alien with an infectious enthusiasm for saving civilizations and talking his way out of danger. The show is packed with unforgettable encounters, from ancient cosmic horrors to sentient cacti. One of its more delightfully ridiculous moments occurs in Meglos (1980), when a villainous alien cactus masquerades as the Doctor, leading to a showdown that’s both tense and absurd—because when your greatest threat is essentially a sentient houseplant, what else can you do?
  • Buckaroo Banzai: Rockstar, scientist, adventurer… Buckaroo Banzai is the pulp-fiction hero who decided mere excellence wasn’t enough. Instead of just saving the world, he does it with style, swagger, and a team of eclectic sidekicks. Nothing captures the film’s gleeful absurdity better than John Lithgow’s wildly unhinged Dr. Emilio Lizardo screaming, “Laugh while you can, monkey boy!”—the kind of line that defies analysis but sticks with you forever.

Influence & Legacy: How Quatermass and Doctor Who Echo in Buckaroo Banzai

While Buckaroo Banzai may seem like an outlier next to Quatermass and the Doctor, he shares unexpected connections with them.

  • Quatermass (1953–1979): The Horror of Science
    Before Doctor Who debuted in 1963, Nigel Kneale’s Quatermass serials had already laid the groundwork for cerebral, unsettling science fiction. The series tackled paranoia, alien invasions, and existential dread with an eerie sense of realism. Doctor Who would later borrow this eerie tone—though usually with fewer existential breakdowns and more running.
  • Doctor Who (1963–present): The Time Lord’s Expanding Universe
    Doctor Who took Quatermass’ horror-infused approach to sci-fi and expanded it into a format that could span centuries and galaxies. Some episodes leaned into the eerie (The Seeds of Doom, 1976; The Impossible Planet, 2006), while others embraced adventure (City of Death, 1979; The Tomb of the Cybermen, 1967). Somewhere between haunted spaceships and questionable fashion choices, Doctor Who became a global phenomenon.
  • Buckaroo Banzai (1984): A Sci-Fi Rock Opera
    Unlike Quatermass and the Doctor, Buckaroo Banzai revels in its absurdity—yet it still features brilliant protagonists battling bizarre alien threats. It owes more to comic book heroics than British sci-fi, but echoes of Quatermass and Doctor Who appear in the way Buckaroo navigates his world with unwavering confidence and scientific know-how. And, of course, the film’s closing sequence—where Buckaroo and his team march triumphantly down a city street in matching outfits—is peak cult sci-fi energy.

The Verdict

These three cult sci-fi productions take radically different storytelling approaches, yet they all explore the unknown through quirky, brilliant protagonists:

  • Quatermass brought dark realism
  • Doctor Who added whimsical exploration
  • Buckaroo Banzai turned everything up to eleven, injecting comic-book energy into sci-fi storytelling

Whether you prefer brooding horror, time-traveling adventures, or rockstar action-heroes, one thing’s certain: sci-fi wouldn’t be the same without these wild, wonderful stories.

Wednesday, August 20, 2025

“As You Know, Bob…”: How to Spot—and Fix—Clunky Exposition

Ah, the infamous “As you know, Bob…” exposition trap. It’s the literary equivalent of a stagehand accidentally wandering into a scene—jarring, unnatural, and instantly pulling the reader out of the story.

Why It’s a Problem

Unnatural Dialogue
Imagine two old space troopers chatting. One says, “As you know, Bob, we barely survived the Fourth Moon War together.” It’s painfully obvious they both already know this—so why are they spelling it out? Forced exposition reads more like a script note than real conversation.

Slows Pacing
Dialogue weighed down with background details stalls momentum. When characters explain instead of act, tension dissolves. In Dune, Frank Herbert introduces intricate political systems through conflict and intrigue—not static conversations summarizing history.

Breaks Immersion
Readers want to feel like they’re inhabiting the world, not watching a documentary about it. In The Long Way to a Small, Angry Planet, Becky Chambers builds character relationships through organic conversations, never dumping in backstory at the expense of flow.


How to Fix It

Reveal Through Action
Let past events drive the present. Instead of characters awkwardly recounting history, let their actions show it. In Leviathan Wakes (The Expanse series), James S.A. Corey establishes tension between Belters and Earthers without explicitly stating their fraught history. Instead, characters react to slurs like "Earther," feel the weight of low gravity on their bodies, and make choices shaped by systemic oppression—all revealing the world’s politics through action.

Imply What Characters Already Know
Show knowledge in how characters behave rather than spelling it out. In The Fifth Season (N.K. Jemisin), Essun’s relationship with Alabaster is deeply complex, but instead of stopping to explain their history, Jemisin lets their interactions speak for themselves. When they reunite, Essun’s sharp words, Alabaster’s guarded responses, and their shared wariness show their past struggles without resorting to an overt history lesson.

Strategically Drop Details
Instead of info-dumping, slip exposition into emotionally charged moments. In The Left Hand of Darkness, Ursula K. Le Guin introduces the alien gender dynamics of Gethenians through Genly Ai’s experiences rather than dry exposition. Instead of saying “Gethenians have no fixed gender,” we watch Genly struggle with pronouns, misread cultural cues, and gradually adjust—letting readers absorb the worldbuilding naturally.


The Exception: Intentional Comedy

If done intentionally, “As you know, Bob…” can work as parody, embracing its awkwardness for comedic effect rather than trying to disguise it. Writers like Douglas Adams (The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy) lean into exaggerated exposition to poke fun at storytelling conventions, making the absurdity part of the humor.

Take this example, where Ford Prefect tries to explain an interstellar catastrophe to Arthur Dent:

“I eventually had to go and lie down in a dark room with a damp towel over my head. The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy says that if you find yourself stuck in a timeline where someone insists on explaining everything to you using entirely unnecessary detail, you should either run, interrupt them rudely, or pretend you’re a chair.”

Here, Adams doesn’t just use exposition—he makes the act of exposition the joke, with Ford growing increasingly exasperated by the unnecessary details being forced upon him.

By deliberately exaggerating exposition, comedic writers make it work because the characters react to it—either mocking it, struggling against it, or delivering it with a knowing wink. So if you’re tempted to use “As you know, Bob…” in your writing, ask yourself: Is it genuinely funny? If yes, lean into the absurdity. If not, it’s probably time to cut it.


Avoiding “As you know, Bob…” strengthens dialogue and keeps readers immersed. Strong storytelling balances worldbuilding with momentum, ensuring every conversation feels authentic and engaging.

Wednesday, August 13, 2025

World-Building 101: Keeping the Details Consistent – Part 2

In Part 1, we explored how world-building inconsistencies—like unexplained recurring C-sections in a shifter romance—can break reader immersion. Now, let’s look at ways authors can build immersive worlds while ensuring consistency.

How Authors Can Avoid World-Building Pitfalls

Writing speculative fiction is a balancing act between creativity and logic. You don’t need to explain everything, but when a recurring event happens in the world, it should feel like a natural consequence—not a convenient handwave. Here’s how to strengthen world-building:

1. Establish the Rules Early

Readers don’t need a dissertation on world mechanics, but they do need enough groundwork to understand how things operate. If male omegas in a shifter romance can conceive and give birth, the author should establish how—whether through magic, biological adaptation, or something else—so it doesn’t feel like an oversight. Even a single well-placed sentence early on can prevent reader confusion later.

2. Be Consistent

Once a rule is set, it needs to hold. If every omega birth in a series has involved rushed C-sections, suddenly switching to natural births in book eight without explanation disrupts established norms. Keeping track of world-building choices ensures they remain internally logical. A simple world-building bible can help.

3. Use Strategic Vagueness (Wisely)

Not every detail needs deep explanation, but vague storytelling only works when it feels intentional, not accidental. If an author wants to skip explicit birthing scenes, that’s fine—but they should at least signal how labor works in their world, even if it’s through brief dialogue or implication.

4. Look for Unintentional Patterns

Repetitive choices (like every birth being identical) can indicate that an author hasn’t fully thought through their world-building. If a specific event unfolds the same way in every book, it’s worth asking whether variety—or a deeper explanation—would enhance the story.

5. Blend Realism with Genre Expectations

Speculative fiction plays fast and loose with reality, but some logistics—like reproduction, survival mechanics, or political systems—benefit from some realism. Not every shifter romance needs medically accurate birth scenes, but a world where every omega undergoes identical C-sections without cause might stretch believability too far.

Why Readers Notice These Details

Readers gravitate to speculative fiction for immersive experiences. They don’t always expect realism, but they do expect internal consistency. When an author establishes rules—whether for magic, technology, or biology—those rules should hold up across the narrative.

World-building inconsistencies don’t always ruin a story, but they add unnecessary friction. Readers may not pinpoint exactly what feels “off,” but they’ll feel it.

Final Thoughts

World-building is an art—but it’s also a craft. Whether you're writing about time-traveling vampires, dystopian AI societies, or shifter romances, the details matter once readers invest in your world.

Now, let’s continue the conversation:

  • Have you ever noticed a world-building inconsistency that pulled you out of a book?
  • How much realism do you think speculative fiction needs?

Wednesday, August 6, 2025

World-Building 101: When the Details Start to Matter (A Lot) – Part 1

As speculative fiction fans, we willingly suspend disbelief all the time. We accept alien societies, magical kingdoms, and werewolves filing taxes like regular citizens. But there’s a catch—an immersive world needs internal consistency. When world-building stumbles, readers notice. Sometimes, far more than authors expect.

When a Pattern Feels … Off

Case in point: a particular m/m shifter series (which shall remain nameless) recently left me scratching my head. Across the first seven books, every pregnant omega underwent a rushed C-section. No explanation, no variation, like C-sections were normal. By book eight, one omega finally had a natural birth—but the details were completely skipped. An epidural was administered, fifteen minutes passed, and suddenly, a swaddled baby appeared.

Now, I’m not necessarily advocating for detailed birthing scenes in romance novels. But after seven books of identical outcomes, I started wondering: Did the author think through how male omegas give birth? Was this just a convenient way to avoid the messiness of labor? More importantly—why did it stand out to me so much?

Why World-Building Consistency Matters

World-building isn’t just about crafting grand ideas—it’s about ensuring the mechanics of a fictional universe hold together. Readers don’t need (or want) a biology textbook in a romance novel, but when fundamental processes—like how a species reproduces—are glossed over or handled inconsistently, immersion cracks.

This issue isn’t exclusive to shifter romances. Across speculative fiction, immersion suffers when authors don’t fully consider logistical details. From unexplained magic systems to societies contradicting their own established rules, world-building inconsistencies can weaken a story’s foundation—even when the plot and characters are compelling.

One of the most common ways immersion falters is through patterns that feel unintentionally repetitive. If an author defaults to the same scenario every time—whether it's identical C-sections, convenient amnesia plots, or recurring magical loopholes—it starts feeling like a storytelling shortcut rather than an organic element of the world.

How Readers Respond to World-Building Gaps

Readers don’t necessarily demand hyper-realistic details. After all, speculative fiction thrives on bending reality. But when a pattern emerges without a logical foundation, it creates a disconnect between the reader and the story.

The problem isn’t that one detail is unrealistic—fiction thrives on impossibilities. The issue arises when a recurring element doesn’t align with the world’s framework. If the rules of the universe suggest variation, but the text repeatedly delivers the same outcome, it signals a missing layer of thought.

In Part 2, we’ll dive into strategies for maintaining strong, consistent world-building—without drowning the narrative in excessive detail. But for now, let’s talk:

  • Have you ever read a book where a world-building inconsistency pulled you out of the story?
  • When does realism enhance a speculative fiction world, and when does it get in the way?

Wednesday, July 30, 2025

Making Plot Events Matter to Your Main Characters: Why Stakes Should Be Personal

A well-constructed story isn’t just a sequence of events—it’s a journey where plot developments deeply impact the main characters. While secondary characters help shape the narrative, it’s the protagonist’s struggles, choices, and consequences that create emotional resonance. If the stakes aren’t personal, why should the protagonist care? And if the protagonist doesn’t care, why should the reader? (Spoiler: They won’t.)

Why Main Characters Should Feel the Full Weight of the Plot

When major story events happen primarily to side characters, the protagonist risks feeling passive. A reactive main character—one who simply watches things unfold—can lead to weak storytelling. Imagine Dune if Paul Atreides just stood on the sidelines while the Fremen handled everything. Sure, the spice must flow, but not without him.

Here’s why keeping stakes personal enhances engagement:

  • Emotional Connection: Readers are invested in the protagonist. If a disaster, conflict, or revelation primarily affects someone else, it creates emotional distance.
  • Character Growth & Change: A strong story arc forces the protagonist to evolve. If the plot primarily impacts side characters, the protagonist misses key opportunities for transformation.
  • Maintaining Narrative Focus: A story should center on the main character’s journey. If the primary tension constantly shifts to side characters' struggles, the protagonist can start to feel secondary in their own story.

Example: The Fifth Season by N.K. Jemisin

Essun doesn’t just experience personal stakes—she is drowning in them. Her home is obliterated, her son is dead, and the entire planet is actively trying to kill her. The world-ending chaos isn’t an abstract apocalypse; it’s her apocalypse. A lesser protagonist might have given up, but Essun makes every choice count, forging ahead in a world literally crumbling beneath her.

Common Pitfalls That Make Side Characters Carry Too Much Weight

  • Secondary Characters Solving Problems: If the protagonist is consistently bailed out by supporting characters rather than resolving their own conflicts, it weakens their agency. (Protagonists aren’t meant to be passengers in their own books.)
  • Major Events Happening Around the Protagonist, Not To Them: If a war begins, a secret is revealed, or a major loss occurs—but the protagonist is only tangentially involved—the emotional stakes feel diluted.
  • Overloading Secondary Characters with More Drama Than the Protagonist: If side characters consistently have bigger, more compelling problems than the main character, it can divert attention from the story’s true focal point.

Example: Mistborn by Brandon Sanderson

Vin begins her story navigating betrayal and survival on a daily basis—so when she steps into a world of magic and rebellion, the stakes feel real. She’s not just toppling a system; she’s learning to trust, finding her own identity, and facing choices that will shape her fate. And when things go sideways (because of course they do), she does not sit back and let the side characters handle it. She becomes the linchpin.

How to Make Plot Events Directly Impact the Protagonist

  • Tie Events to the Protagonist’s Emotional Arc: Whatever happens in the story should challenge their beliefs, relationships, or goals.
  • Ensure the Protagonist Makes Choices That Drive the Story: Rather than being swept along by external events, they should make decisions that shape the narrative.
  • Let the Protagonist Struggle, Win, and Lose: If consequences fall primarily on side characters, the stakes may not feel real. Let the protagonist feel the weight of their decisions.

Example: Dune by Frank Herbert

Paul Atreides doesn’t get a free pass to leadership; he earns it through pain, loss, and existential dread. Every choice he makes—from fleeing Arrakis to embracing his role in Fremen society—comes with consequences that ripple through the narrative. The universe isn’t simply unfolding around him. It’s pressing against him, demanding action. And like any great protagonist, he steps up, takes the blows, and reshapes fate itself.

Final Thoughts

Your protagonist isn’t just there to witness the plot—they’re there to shape it, be changed by it, and wrestle with its consequences. If the story could happen with a different main character and feel the same, the stakes aren’t personal enough. Give your protagonist choices that matter, conflicts they can’t escape, and consequences that cut deep—because that’s what makes a story unforgettable.

Wednesday, July 23, 2025

Formatting Scene Breaks: Guiding Your Reader Through Transitions

A well-placed scene break is like a subtle nod to the reader—it signals a shift in time, location, or perspective without breaking immersion. Choose the right one, and your story flows effortlessly. So, what works best for your novel? Let’s explore.

How to Visibly Mark a Scene Break

Blank Line Space - A simple but effective pause between paragraphs.

Centered Symbols - Common options include:

  • *** (three asterisks)
  • ### (pound signs)
  • §§§ (section marks)

Custom Decorative Glyphs - Some genres favor unique symbols that match their theme.

Numbered or Titled Divisions - When transitions are major, a heading can help.

Drop Cap or Styling Change - A visual cue, like an enlarged first letter or italics, signals the shift.

Horizontal Rule - A thin divider spanning the page creates a clear separation.

Typography Adjustments - Font or formatting shifts (such as bold dialogue entries) can mark a change.

Chapter Break Instead - If the shift is significant, starting a new chapter may be more effective.

How to Choose the Right Scene Break

  • Genre Considerations: Fantasy and historical fiction often embrace decorative glyphs, while contemporary novels may favor minimalist formatting.
  • Pacing Needs: Simple line breaks encourage smooth reading, while dramatic visual cues signal major turning points.
  • Story Tone: Horror novels might benefit from stark typography shifts, whereas whimsical fantasy might lean into ornate scene markers.

Final Thought

Scene breaks aren’t just formatting—they’re a part of storytelling rhythm. The right transition method keeps your readers engaged and guides them through your world with seamless clarity.